In the article, "Targetting 'Slutty Students' by Jessica Valenti, she argues that the students of Stuyvesant High School, especially the girls, should have the right to wear anything they want without being seen as sex symbols. She uses a defensive tone, ethics and logic to express her thoughts about this issue.
Soooo.. It's a short article but I feel like she did use a lot of rhetorical strategies. If you guys find anymore that I should use or if I need to fix anything, let me know! Thanks :)
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I would possibly reword the first part by saying "In the article, "Targeting 'Slutty Students', Jessica Valenti aruges...."
Only other thing I noticed is in that your second sentence of the thesis is in a passive tone. Maybe say "Valenti uses..." or something like that. And maybe change "ethics and logic" to appeal to ethos and logos?
Totally up to you. Great job! :)
I will definitely do that! Thank youu :))
I think its great so far. be sure to make it interesting and draw people in! :)
As to drawing people in, I think that's accomplished by having the word "slutty" as the fifth word in the first sentence.
Rita,
I agree with Roxy about word order. Small change, but it's an effective one. The only wording issue might be "sex symbols". Isn't she veering more toward harassment? "Sex symbols" seems to convey something slightly less sinister than what the author's going for.
Good observation, Steve. I'd agree.
Overall, this is working well. Just a few small changes. :)
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