Post Discussion # 3

"Many successful writers blend academic, professional language with popular expressions and sayings."

In this passage mix academic and colloquial styles, the use of our everyday language and academics is a proper way to write academically in any discipline. The emphasis is on blending these two together to make writing for students more interesting. while writing using formal language in academics students also incorporate their own informal language in their writing. As the passage says, it makes the essay more enliven to read and easy to understand. And, also this vigor style needs to be used in wrtiting to keep it active academically.

"In this chapter, we want to show you how you can write effective academic arguments while holding on to some of your own voice."

This passage is from the introduction of the "Ain't So/ Is Not" chapter, and is about our own words and phrases also counts in wirting. Blending in with academic phrase and words which can make it easier to read and more relaxed. But, the informal language is to be used in an approriate manner and write more often in academic terms. The blend of academic and our everyday language then enlivens what we write and more interesting.


Paragraphs Edited:

During the 1970's most of Nike's advertisements were in print form, and Nike did not utilize athletes to endorse the brand at the time. Later, on October 1982 Nike's first televised advertisements and use of athletes to endorse the Nike brand in shoes had come to reality. Today, many of Nike's advertisements in shoes both print and televised are fascinating to consumers. Therefore, endorsing the Nike brand shoes by ahtletes and celebrities has been one of Nike advertiser's strategies since the 1980's to sell the Nike brand shoe. However, their main focus is to make advertisements more appealing to consumers need for aesthetic sensations, need for a role model, and need to achieve to sell the number one brand in shoes, Nike.


In conclusion, the Nike brand shoe will be very successful in any advertisement tactics apply by advertisers in advertising a new look in shoes in the near future. Recently, Nike Inc. had just released the new look in Nike's 2012 Air Jordan's shoes in the world market. And, from my own perspective of the shoes; Nike has done a tremendous task in designinng the new Air Jordan's. However, with this new Nike Air Jordan's in the world market and other styles in any category of shoes in the near future. Hopefully, the nike brand in oes will go all the way in the world of advertisement.




After completing my revision on these two paragraphs particularly word diction. I discover that I need to work on synonyms to add more vigorous style in my writing. I also need to use more formal diction and less on informal diction. Also, syntax and grammar is another problem. Transitional words and phrases also needs to be incorporated in my writing as well.