REDUNDANCY / REPETITION
1. The author demonstrates her humorous tone by stating "We don't need to read maps; we get our geography by an officious sounding person who lives in a little window in our dashboard."
2. The authors diction and quotations can likely persuade the reader to believing the film is almost pornographic rated.
3. The quote emphasized how much Henry is enjoying life in New York City.
4. *Insert quote* crystalizes Henry's choice to play in the city.
PASSIVE VOICE
1. Her recent blog in the Huffington Post raises a valid question as to whether or not children are failing with too much technology.
2. The concession states the possibility that infidelity can destroy a relationship.
3. Upon viewing some of the comments, the reader can assume that age range produces a broader spectrum of moral standpoints.
WORDINESS
1. Are they the pebble inducing landslide, causing technology dependent humans like in the Pixar film Wall-E?
2. Andrew O' Hehir wrote about "Breaking Dawn part 1", the 4th film of the "Twilight Saga."
3. Infidelity is not just an affair, but rather the start of fixing the broken parts to make the relationship whole again.
4. This unconventional choice stems from parent's wanting their children to pursue their dreams vice stress from an undue burden.
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