Meghan Stanton
Professor Amy Bolaski
English 100: 1459
September 11, 2013
In the article "Stinging Fingerprints" the author Angela Conner discusses the difference between S&M, and abuse. The story began describing the experience that was taken place by her character (not named). This character thought she knew what S&M was, and how people did it, but she never quite grasped it until she experienced it first hand. The experience was none like she ever had before. Her closest friend asked her a very important question, "how is it not abuse?" And her answer was something most people who are passionate about this topic would agree with, she said "because it felt good." Experiencing something as drastic as getting slapped in the face would seem almost obsurd to most people. How could someone actually enjoy feeling pain? The idea of being able to take that pain is what gets people aroused, and that's why they enjoy it.
2 comments:
So far your introduction seems to be talking moreso about the content of the article and not how the writer has written the article. I will be interested to see more of your paper.
Hi Meghan,
This essay has long intrigued me. I'm glad someone chose it.
I'd consider rethinking the first sentence, though: "n the article "Stinging Fingerprints" the author Angela Conner discusses the difference between S&M, and abuse." Yes, she DOES articulate why her experience isn't abusive, but this isn't at all her main point (opening with this suggests the point of the essay is to distinguish between abuse and violent eroticism).
Make sure you write in present tense: "The story began describing the experience that was taken place by her character (not named)" becomes "The story BEGINS by describing her experience . . . "
I'm not sure what you mean by "character". The essay is autobiographical and it's non-fiction - it doesn't contain a character. Conner herself is the protagonist of her own story (and thus is clearly named).
Same thing tense-wise here: "S&M was . . ." This would be correct only if S&M no longer existed. As such, it's "S&M is".
I do agree with Shannon. Yes, you should summarize the essay in your intro, but it should be a brief summary (see handout on intro, voice lecture, etc.) The other elements are missing - namely the thesis. You don't yet identify Conner's main point (remember that it isn't to distinguish) or name any strategies she uses to convey and develop that point.
If you haven't read any or some of the materials, you'll want to do so (the prompt, voice lecture, rhetorical strategies, list, handout on introduction, etc.) I think reading or revisiting them will help you put together your intro and thesis.
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